some drawings

[Gramm]

youre continueing to make some great improvements, keep it up

[ShayneZee]

Okay, for the two drawings of the guy. The first thing that caught my eye was his bandana. I think it's a bit too high on his head. But I can't say for sure. Plus it's your character design.

The second drawing of the guy, his hands look weird. The main thing is that the proportions are a little off. The length of the palm and middle finger should be roughly the same length. And the thumb (when the hand is laid out flat) should reach just passed the knuckles.

Your facial proportions have improved a lot in terms of were the features are all placed. Also they are a lot less sharp. So at the moment I think the main thing is hands now.

For the drawing of the girl. The water probably should've been drawn in and not screentoned. However drawing water is super time consuming and a pain, so no big deal. Plus it looks pretty cool the way you did the reflection in it. The clouds are the main thing that take away from the picture. That said clouds are super hard to draw, and even harder to screentone. I think that the main problem with them is that you added the gray and black areas to them. It doesn't look screentoned and is really bold so it takes away a lot of the attention. I think it might have looked better to have just left them pure white.

The girl herself is very well done. The pose looks natural, her expression is cute and well drawn. The only thing that I notice about it is her left (Our right) arm is a bit thin. Her cheek could be a little rounder but otherwise I think the pic is really good. Again her anatomy and pose are very well drawn. The expression especially is good. The light source is excellent, I don't think I see any problems with it, (though you might want to ask Ashikai too since she's the coloring expert) But ya, another major improvement. And it's good to see you experimenting with backgrounds.


And since no one commented on the colored picture I'll comment on that too. It was very good also, the face was another improvement, the light source is decent, it needs a bit of work in a few areas but nothing major. The anatomy seems pretty decent, her arms are a bit too thin, but otherwise another good pic.

The main thing I like about that picture is the hair, it flows very well and the way you colored it is very cool. Keep it up!

[Loom]

One of these days, I'm gonna scan you more goodies, bro. An old man passed away near where I live, and his son gave me a bunch of his giant vintage artbooks. They're awesome and have these cool techniques and great nudes. (That sounds pervy, but hear me out. They're successive pictures of athletes and action poses, so they're really useful.) I think you're improving. Your forms have solid balance; now it's just a matter of tweaking anatomy and lineart. Which, by the way, the lineart is improving at warp speed. <3

P.S. When I get ready to make in-depth crit, I'll leave them on dA. Most of what I have to say is better shown with pictures, though, so I may send those to you, too. Kim Possible's hips are very boyish, but it's a risky pose. Most of what's wrong with the guy is that his bony prominences and fingers are very...spiky. It will all come together with time and practice, though.

[uchiha007]

youre continueing to make some great improvements, keep it up

thanx a lot man, i am glad to hear im improving =D makes me incredibly happy

Okay, for the two drawings of the guy. The first thing that caught my eye was his bandana. I think it's a bit too high on his head. But I can't say for sure. Plus it's your character design.

The second drawing of the guy, his hands look weird. The main thing is that the proportions are a little off. The length of the palm and middle finger should be roughly the same length. And the thumb (when the hand is laid out flat) should reach just passed the knuckles.

Your facial proportions have improved a lot in terms of were the features are all placed. Also they are a lot less sharp. So at the moment I think the main thing is hands now.

For the drawing of the girl. The water probably should've been drawn in and not screentoned. However drawing water is super time consuming and a pain, so no big deal. Plus it looks pretty cool the way you did the reflection in it. The clouds are the main thing that take away from the picture. That said clouds are super hard to draw, and even harder to screentone. I think that the main problem with them is that you added the gray and black areas to them. It doesn't look screentoned and is really bold so it takes away a lot of the attention. I think it might have looked better to have just left them pure white.

The girl herself is very well done. The pose looks natural, her expression is cute and well drawn. The only thing that I notice about it is her left (Our right) arm is a bit thin. Her cheek could be a little rounder but otherwise I think the pic is really good. Again her anatomy and pose are very well drawn. The expression especially is good. The light source is excellent, I don't think I see any problems with it, (though you might want to ask Ashikai too since she's the coloring expert) But ya, another major improvement. And it's good to see you experimenting with backgrounds.


And since no one commented on the colored picture I'll comment on that too. It was very good also, the face was another improvement, the light source is decent, it needs a bit of work in a few areas but nothing major. The anatomy seems pretty decent, her arms are a bit too thin, but otherwise another good pic.

The main thing I like about that picture is the hair, it flows very well and the way you colored it is very cool. Keep it up!

hmmmmm i think so too, the bandana is kinda misplaced,if i really look at it closely, it is far back in the head.Hands AUGH >.< damn beasts lol yea i will dedicate a lot of time drawing those in many different angles to get it right.Maybe ill scout for some techniques on deviantart. Well at least my faces improved, that's a start =D i tried out to draw some bumps i have missed before on my drawings.lol yea i just tried to improvised on the water, i really need to go and find some tutorials as how to draw them.Same gos for the clouds, they r harder than i thought >.< So you think white would be better?hmmmmmmm maybe u r right.I just scouted some mangas and some i saw had shades on the clouds so i decided to try it. yeah... the hands again lol i will definitely practice those before i keep going. well thanx yet again man =D i am looking forward to the next critique

One of these days, I'm gonna scan you more goodies, bro. An old man passed away near where I live, and his son gave me a bunch of his giant vintage artbooks. They're awesome and have these cool techniques and great nudes. (That sounds pervy, but hear me out. They're successive pictures of athletes and action poses, so they're really useful.) I think you're improving. Your forms have solid balance; now it's just a matter of tweaking anatomy and lineart. Which, by the way, the lineart is improving at warp speed. <3

P.S. When I get ready to make in-depth crit, I'll leave them on dA. Most of what I have to say is better shown with pictures, though, so I may send those to you, too. Kim Possible's hips are very boyish, but it's a risky pose. Most of what's wrong with the guy is that his bony prominences and fingers are very...spiky. It will all come together with time and practice, though.

awww that's sad . I like the idea of seeing those nudes, especially for female anatomy haha xD. No but seriously, most of the scans and stuff you have showed have been really helpful, not to mention that is easy to understand,thanx for the ones u have send so far =D.yay, I am happy that i am going to the right direction ^^. sounds fair enough, i shall be looking forward for the critiques then ^^ remember, show no mercy >.> lol XD spiky fingers huh,yeah i will need in depth practice with hands, them and i will have a long long talk lol.I shall practice and give my best ^^



well just another drawing.Trying some stuff.My idea was to use this to make a cover,it is still a WIP.hmmmmmm well here it is

[Gramm]

real quick cause I gots to get to sleep, the sash on her leg, pay attention the the direction and current scale of the leg. I dont have a neat board thingie so I cant do red lines, but the way the sash is sitting should be a a different angel with the way you have that leg posed.