Ashikai's Artwork

[boogie2it]

ha. Architorture. that's a good one uchiha. ^_^

[uchiha007]

Originally Posted by boogie2it

ha. Architorture. that's a good one uchiha. ^_^

hahaha yeah, i've spent some nights with little or not sleep at all cuz of the projects i have to do and the deadlines *shivers* get the chills just remembering them

[Ashikai]

Ahahahaa.... Seriously, that pun has never been more true. I just spent two hours inking this darned thing. >__<

Oh well. Lines are done. Tones next... (when I can get to the massive scanner at the library. The paper doesn't fit in mine. =\ )



Seriously, I had windows DOWN by the end of this. Count 'em. There are 63 windows. God I suck.

[EphiamOricuna]

Oh ho ho. Again, I have to say that I have taken a fond liking to your style, Ash. There is something about it that makes it stand out, regardless of it being not all that different from the standard style that has been the norm of a good few artists that I have seen.

I am going to have to point out that I do not like the hair of that fellow at the bottom of the page. That whole clump of white on the top of his head just makes his hair look flat to me, and the same can be said about his left (for us) arm. And for the arm, the shadow/shading looks more as though it is some kind of design. His neck and right arm are great.

Oh! And I really love the building! I just don't like those scribbles by its side. I know that it is probably grass or something, but I can't really tell without really LOOKING at that spot. The building its self however is beautiful, and I don't think that I would change anything about it!

Good luck on your search for the great printer. It would be great to see that piece toned, and I hope that it pops in in the near future!

[Ashikai]

Originally Posted by EphiamOricuna

Oh ho ho. Again, I have to say that I have taken a fond liking to your style, Ash. There is something about it that makes it stand out, regardless of it being not all that different from the standard style that has been the norm of a good few artists that I have seen.

I am going to have to point out that I do not like the hair of that fellow at the bottom of the page. That whole clump of white on the top of his head just makes his hair look flat to me, and the same can be said about his left (for us) arm. And for the arm, the shadow/shading looks more as though it is some kind of design. His neck and right arm are great.

Oh! And I really love the building! I just don't like those scribbles by its side. I know that it is probably grass or something, but I can't really tell without really LOOKING at that spot. The building its self however is beautiful, and I don't think that I would change anything about it!

Good luck on your search for the great printer. It would be great to see that piece toned, and I hope that it pops in in the near future!

I dunno about my artwork standing out or anything, but thanks. =D

I agree with the flatness of his hair. I'm having extreme issues with it that I'm gonna try to fix via computer, but we'll see. I need to pay a visit to the giant scanner in the Library before I can do that though. =\

I know the grass looks funny right now, but keep in mind that these are the bare inks and that this cover is gonna get seriously toned, which is what should be able to 'fix' that grass's optical illusion or something. I can hope, right?

Here's an example of my hair-catastrophe. Hand inked. Two spots need touch up in that first panel... excuse me while I run away to fix them.

Blarg. Any suggestions, Eph?

[ShayneZee]

I kind of agree and disagree with EphiamOricuna. I agree that in the image with the building the hair looks a little flat, but I don't think it's the way you inked it. I think it's that the left side of his hair is very sharply pointed. This thought was really only supported by the comic page, where his hair is much more rounded yet it looks a lot more flowing to me at least. Even though the inking style stayed the same. Or close to the same.

As for suggestions for the comic page. None really, the only thing that I can see at the moment is his hand. It's not impossibly bent, but whenever I take out an earphone I have my palm facing more towards me, instead of infront of me. If that makes sense. . .

As for you artwork in general it's very well done. Especially your inking. It's flowing a natural, the lines are very clean and smooth. You should be really proud of yourself.

[EphiamOricuna]

Wah ha ha. Oh wow, that looks great for having been hand inked! Looks like it could have been done on a tablet or some other art-related software. You are definitely a good inker, and that is something that I can not deny! You also seem to be going for that shading style that I just can not describe. Not that it is bad, but I do not know if it has a name or not! But what I mean is using blotches of ink instead of cross-hatching. If you have ever read D.Gray-Man or Tegami Bachi (Letter Bee), then you would know what I am referring to. =O

And...uh... the only real thing I can say that would be in the lines of "critique" would be that I think his hand is just a tad too big. It not be, mind you, and it could just be me. Other than that, I think that it is indeed fine work! As Shayne has said before me: You should be very proud of yourself! Especially for producing work like this. =D

[SeireyYuth]

I like the page with the building very much Ash.

[Twill]

Wow. Awesome building, Ash. That is anything but "flat," and is a fine example of a "drafted" style of building. The patch of black glass is only glaring because I think such a value would be given for a night scene of the building, which if you're planning at this point to do would require a copious amount of tone to pull off. Which *might* be what you're planning, so I reserve judgment.

I prefer the look of hand-done ink to computer inks, really, most of the time. Thought that's a matter of personal preference. For me, it's just so traditional "manga." I love nothing more than nib-done stuff and technical pen. I think a lot of people don't catch on to traditional tools; most stuff is a hybrid these days anyway and a mix of techniques, despite the American push for software that emphasizes the tablet "ink style." Japan is still very much grounded in hand-done inks (and so are many, many American studios).

I'm not gonna critique your page. It's just like I tell certain other people (*cough* Loom) - you're at that stage where you have to "up" your speed, and because of that, you're gonna get small mistakes like or no. (Or big ones, like in early CLAMP works, LOL.) Big whoop. I see "real" manga making little nuance mistakes, but your art looks good enough and your placement is natural enough that you should just take them in stride and push forward despite them so you can get stuff done. Don't redo. Push forward and get done. (I'm not advocating you to be sloppy; just don't be too perfectionistic.) The nuances will fix themselves as you go. But your probably know all this already and it's cliche-been-there-heard-that; I just repeated it 'cause I think it's good advice to reflect on.

On to your hair catastrophe. I'll call it like I see it. It bothers me, too, but for a very simple reason. The blob of white shine in his hair is pretty round and is continuous to how you've inked his black shirt. If the shine of the hair was smaller, finer, and more jagged, I think it wouldn't "continue" into the shirt. It might be something you try on a sketch and see if it helps differentiate it from the shine of the shirt. Right now, when I squint a bit and look straight on, my eye considers the two areas (shirt and hair) to be the "same." If that makes any sense.

[EphiamOricuna]

I want to post here again, but because I have already made a comment regarding the latest picture that you have shown... I will have to say something else! And what is that something? Well... uh... I think that I am going to do a fan art of your villain for kicks once I have completed my current drawing. (Woo laud. Doing something entirely in pencil and then shading it in is a loooooong process =/ )

After all, you went and did three for me!