Reiki Manga

[sergey500]

Before you view the manga below, a word of warning, do not judge by the first 5 or so pages, they are badly done. Just try to bare with the story.

Here is the link...(please keep in mind the front cover was done over a year ago when idea acutelly hit me to make somehting called Reiki which means in Japanese Rei - Spirit Ki - Energy).

http://sergey500.servebeer.com:8007/Reiki.htm Vol.1 Ch.1
http://sergey500.servebeer.com:8007/reiki2.htm Vol 1 Ch.2 - Still in progress.

If you be so nice comment...I don't care if its bad or good critique just comment, I wish to know how it looks.
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Latest page (via deviantart) http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/40439060/

[nicolepalmer]

well i think that you need to work on line art definately and anatomy.But it looks like you like to try so go for it and good luck^^

[sergey500]

Yup. I already know that. If you look through my art gallery, you'd notice my lineart and anatomy isn't the issue because on a larger scale I seem to draw better (No resizing to smaller scale for the manga won't work, comes out different proportions). Also the main reasons its like that is because I didn't do any sketching with circles and lines to keep in propertions, I did on the latest page but something happened with pixel export and came out bad anyways. My manga hates me.

[sergey500]

And now I provide a example of my manga for those of you too lazy to click the link.

[T0M0_chan]

well i think that you need to work on line art definately and anatomy.But it looks like you like to try so go for it and good luck^^
yeah,what she said.
don't worry tho, atleast you got sum skills toning it.
when I try to make manga, it has to be made from pencils &
sketches only! why? cuz I don't hav a freaki'n photo shop T__T
yes...yes..I am miserable ToT

[sergey500]

Oh...well if I told you that you are missing out, what that be news to you? (oh my...that sounded so rude, I am sorry, just saying photoshop is dead useful, i also use the Manga Studio Debut 3.0. )

But, Look at bright side you can hone your drawing skills on paper, may I see a sample?

Thanks...I didn't know i had skills in toning, hell I couldn't master it till...like pg.4 I wish I could tone like real manga-ka. It would easily excuse my off propertion body parts.

[T0M0_chan]

Oh...well if I told you that you are missing out, what that be news to you? (oh my...that sounded so rude, I am sorry, just saying photoshop is dead useful, i also use the Manga Studio Debut 3.0. )

But, Look at bright side you can hone your drawing skills on paper, may I see a sample?

Thanks...I didn't know i had skills in toning, hell I couldn't master it till...like pg.4 I wish I could tone like real manga-ka. It would easily excuse my off propertion body parts.

yeah,sure...
sorry if its too big tho
http://ic1.deviantart.com/fs10/i/2006/095/b/b/good_and_bad_by_happybunnyROCKS.jpg

[T0M0_chan]

hmm...
I think to fix this one a bit...
whaddya guys think?

[sergey500]

? Sorry, I can't see it.

[T0M0_chan]

? Sorry, I can't see it.
whaa-?
shoot, i'll try to fix it. {whatever did I do? -__-}

[Meimi132]

Tis very funky! The lineart's pretty good, I can't really talk tho hehe, I want mine to be more black, or black altogether, not grey dammit! I can make it black with gamma correction tho. So I will in the future.
I love your use of screentone aswell! (Or digitone, whatever it is, it works heh)
(Oh yeah, if u shrunk the image it might look better)

[sergey500]

..If you had photoshop you can just do threshold but that would make you're lines etchy. What is gamma correction, which program?

I like you're manga, its so cute and funny. I wonder where my guardian thingy is, gonna go tell it my lucky number.

[sergey500]

No more comments? T_T people hate it that much?! *sob*

[sergey500]

Well I see I am not going to get any more commentm but thanks for you're input anyways.

[thePatches]

::hasn't been here in a while::

My biggest crit is the font face you are using for the lettering. Since it's allcaps, it's hard to read. o.0

[sergey500]

Well if you look at any other pro-manga or manga from japan that has been edited. It all in font thats forces it to be all caps. I use Manga Temple.

[sergey500]

Well this died rather quickly.

[sergey500]

Although this died, I just want to show my latest page anyways, http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/32470620/ for nice quick link.

[sergey500]

I should probably let this RIP, but here is another update for this manga http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/33139778/

[gynocrat]

I didn't bother to look because...well, you apologized for it before presenting it. 0_0. I have to ask, if you were at a job interview would tell the guy interviewing you 'hey I suck, I just want to get that out of the way...' Of course not.

I did note your comments about using Manga Temple. Bad font. Stick to Wild Words, much better.

[sergey500]

Hehe, yeah that would be one screwed up interview. But I am not getting a job in this, I am just practsing this and using it as hobby...well maybe if become good enough might look into becoming a comic artist / manga-ka but for now. Doing this as hobby and asking how it looks is good by me.

Wow, is the font really that annoying? So many people mentioned the font is distracting and just doesnt fit too wll with it all.

Well...i don't want to dissapoint the people, but fine I will just take out the "Stop/looking in the wrong place part", if you have time look at it, but thanks for commenting, been awhile here that no one commented.

[sergey500]

Dissaponting how nobody comments. Reason for why I would like to see more comments is when people comment, I know for fact they read and looked at my work instead of glancing at it and hating it. When people comment, it gives a feeling that they liked some part of the work, even if it negative critique. And I need opinions.

[Impulse1o1]

maybe people dont "care or wish to waste their time", as how you put it.
anyway, i tried to browse through your comic but i cant get to the next page. browser problems?

[KeoKa]

Yeah me too....

[sergey500]

maybe people dont "care or wish to waste their time", as how you put it.
anyway, i tried to browse through your comic but i cant get to the next page. browser problems?

I know people don't care, that why I am urging them comment. Reasons why are in post above.

Hm, what are you doing? You're suppose to click on the picture and then the next one. The arrows are to go to more pictures, to view full you click on them. It works for me, for my laptop and for a bunch of other people that tried. Can you describe the porblem?

[sergey500]

Finally reached chapter 2, but I start off with horrible chapter cover http://www.deviantart.com/view/33567792/

[Cowboychamploo44]

Your story reminds me of Yu Yu Hakusho 0_o. But it's funny though.

[sergey500]

Your story reminds me of Yu Yu Hakusho 0_o. But it's funny though.
lol my friends said the same thing, their like "Did you just copy yu yu hakuasho and bleach?" and i had no intention of doing that, I was hoping to be oringal. Well now I know where i subconciously got the idea for some of the beginning.

[sergey500]

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/33902243/ chapter 2, page.1 and it not as good as i planned....

[Cowboychamploo44]

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/33902243/ chapter 2, page.1 and it not as good as i planned....


Hahahaha! I just read the first page of chapter 2...can't wait to see what happens next... How many chapters are you going to do?

[sergey500]

Hahahaha! I just read the first page of chapter 2...can't wait to see what happens next... How many chapters are you going to do?

Great that you like it (ego booster), but the amount of chapters...eh...I don't have them numbered, I have rough estimate in my head and thats alot...lets see roughly speaking volume contains 10 chapters, then maybe I will have roughly 3 volumes...

Oh wait, "just read..", did you read the first chapter too?

[Cowboychamploo44]

Great that you like it (ego booster), but the amount of chapters...eh...I don't have them numbered, I have rough estimate in my head and thats alot...lets see roughly speaking volume contains 10 chapters, then maybe I will have roughly 3 volumes...

Oh wait, "just read..", did you read the first chapter too?

Yeah I read it. You got better when the story progressed.

[sergey500]

Yeah I read it. You got better when the story progressed.

Aesomeness
here is next page http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/34195387/ i got alot devwatchs from this one! woot.

[sergey500]

Its been awhile, here is the next page http://www.deviantart.com/view/35176818/

[Cowboychamploo44]

Its been awhile, here is the next page http://www.deviantart.com/view/35176818/

Nice job! Keep it up ^_*...When the guy with the black hair punched the other dude he didn't have the knife in his right arm...

[sergey500]

Nice job! Keep it up ^_*...When the guy with the black hair punched the other dude he didn't have the knife in his right arm...
^_^:Thanks, I noticed that later, also in last badly done image there is no cut on his hand. Oh well, maybe I won't be so careless next time.

[Cowboychamploo44]

In the last image did he hit the weapons away with his knife or did he make them disappear?

[sergey500]

In the last image did he hit the weapons away with his knife or did he make them disappear?
I hate how badly i that panel, he hit them away.

[grimmy]

Yo! make some comments and suggestions to these.
I need to get better!
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0641.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0641.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0584.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0584.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0583.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0583.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0585.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0585.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0624.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0624.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0626.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0626.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0627.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0627.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0628.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0628.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0536.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0536.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0539.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0539.jpg)
I couldn't get all my pics online but I pick out the decent ones.
I make my own characters

[Mutsuki_Kaori]

*Glances around the room*

Guess I’ll do a comment; as usual I have this habit of critiquing work when I see it and offering up suggestions so…

1) Anatomy and basic form. Okay I’m noticing you make the faces VERY angular. While in manga that is a rather common thing to do you kind of take it to extremes.
You aren’t too bad at handling full frontal views but I’d advise you to work on your ¾, profile and looking up poses. Doodle those constantly on scrap paper if you can and with the profile and ¾ views, just so we’re clear the line for the jawbone should connect to the ear, noticing the profile view on your most recent work is off in that respect.
You do need to work on hand poses a bit as well, when you draw the hand in panels 1 and 4 in your most recent work it looks pretty good. However when he is holding the knife in the last panel it looks quite off. When drawing characters holding things I’ve found it’s best to hold a similarly shaped object and look at my own hand when I draw (you don’t have to copy it exactly, actually I advise you don’t… especially if you’re drawing the hand of someone of the opposite gender). When you do this enough you stop needing to hold an object and can just make your hand ‘pose’ doing it for a long enough time and you’ll have how it should look branded onto your brain.
The three dimensionality of objects is another thing you need to work on. The kitchen utensils rushing towards the character’s face in the most recent page look quite odd. It’s good to doodle random objects you see laying around just to get a feel for how they look so you’ll remember it later.
Clothing is another thing I’m noticing. With the character’s shirt at the bottem of the page it’d be good to see more detail on the make of the clothing. The seams need work as do the folds, work a bit more on the thickness as well. It looks kind of like he’s wearing a paper shirt (^_^;)
Also pay more attention to backgrounds, you obviously have a very shounen style so throwing them in is very important.
2) Inking. Inking isn’t bad, not particularly eye popping but it’s passable. Try working more with the line width variation (don’t feel so bad though, many people don’t get this) by thickening the lines where they meet. Use thin thinner lines for hair than for skin. Depending on fabric use thicker lines for clothing and objects. To make it more three-dimensional use a bit of solid black for the chin’s shadow, you’ll be surprised how much that helps.
You aren’t doing too badly otherwise, tonework looks okay; the action lines are not bad, and definitely improving.
Anyways, I’ve rambled enough. It does look like you're on the right track though so keep it up. The only way to improve is to keep drawing.

[sergey500]

Yo! make some comments and suggestions to these.
I need to get better!
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0641.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0641.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0584.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0584.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0583.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0583.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0585.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0585.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0624.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0624.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0626.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0626.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0627.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0627.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0628.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0628.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0536.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0536.jpg)
http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g5...e/100_0539.jpg (http://i53.photobucket.com/albums/g59/katake/100_0539.jpg)
I couldn't get all my pics online but I pick out the decent ones.
I make my own characters

The first few pics aren't bad, but isn't this called spamming?

[sergey500]

*Glances around the room*

Guess I’ll do a comment; as usual I have this habit of critiquing work when I see it and offering up suggestions so…

1) Anatomy and basic form. Okay I’m noticing you make the faces VERY angular. While in manga that is a rather common thing to do you kind of take it to extremes.
You aren’t too bad at handling full frontal views but I’d advise you to work on your ¾, profile and looking up poses. Doodle those constantly on scrap paper if you can and with the profile and ¾ views, just so we’re clear the line for the jawbone should connect to the ear, noticing the profile view on your most recent work is off in that respect.
You do need to work on hand poses a bit as well, when you draw the hand in panels 1 and 4 in your most recent work it looks pretty good. However when he is holding the knife in the last panel it looks quite off. When drawing characters holding things I’ve found it’s best to hold a similarly shaped object and look at my own hand when I draw (you don’t have to copy it exactly, actually I advise you don’t… especially if you’re drawing the hand of someone of the opposite gender). When you do this enough you stop needing to hold an object and can just make your hand ‘pose’ doing it for a long enough time and you’ll have how it should look branded onto your brain.
The three dimensionality of objects is another thing you need to work on. The kitchen utensils rushing towards the character’s face in the most recent page look quite odd. It’s good to doodle random objects you see laying around just to get a feel for how they look so you’ll remember it later.
Clothing is another thing I’m noticing. With the character’s shirt at the bottem of the page it’d be good to see more detail on the make of the clothing. The seams need work as do the folds, work a bit more on the thickness as well. It looks kind of like he’s wearing a paper shirt (^_^;)
Also pay more attention to backgrounds, you obviously have a very shounen style so throwing them in is very important.
2) Inking. Inking isn’t bad, not particularly eye popping but it’s passable. Try working more with the line width variation (don’t feel so bad though, many people don’t get this) by thickening the lines where they meet. Use thin thinner lines for hair than for skin. Depending on fabric use thicker lines for clothing and objects. To make it more three-dimensional use a bit of solid black for the chin’s shadow, you’ll be surprised how much that helps.
You aren’t doing too badly otherwise, tonework looks okay; the action lines are not bad, and definitely improving.
Anyways, I’ve rambled enough. It does look like you're on the right track though so keep it up. The only way to improve is to keep drawing.

Yeah, I noticed I have strong habit of drawing direct views. Yeah, I know I need more physical references, espcially later on when he gains something, but I'll worry about it later. I noticed the T-Shirt problem, my clothing design isn't very good. Also I need anglular perspectives in general.

And of course weighted ink is also a problem, I was never very good at that (yes i saw the tutorial on tokyopop). well I have plenty of pages to practise with.

[sergey500]

I am amazed on how fast this section moves. This thread keeps dieing....I think this is the most active subforum on all of TP.

[sergey500]

Wah...I feel like i am just annoying people now since no one is commenting...

well anyways, next page (I seriously need a new way to tone)
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/35597615/

[Cowboychamploo44]

Wow...so the guy was demon possesed or something?

[sergey500]

No, that would be wayyyy to cliche. Don't wanna spoil anything, but here is hint: Bloodlines. Well...that really doesn't tell you much...but whatever. Stay tuned to find out in next chapter they hint things out about why that happened. No more spoilers.

[Cowboychamploo44]

...Bloodiness...Okay. Is anybody else helping you with your manga?

[sergey500]

Hm? No. I do it all by myself. Why?

[Cowboychamploo44]

Hm? No. I do it all by myself. Why?

...Just asking. I'm thinking about starting a series too.

[Cowboychamploo44]

How long does it take to do a page sergey?

[sergey500]

How long does it take to do a page sergey?

One day. 6 hours give or take.

[sergey500]

...Just asking. I'm thinking about starting a series too.

Go ahead. Its loads of fun. Ok not always fun when your trying to make deadline, geez thats annoying. And now I have something to do this summer, yay. And it helps my art skills, the more i draw, the better I get and this forces practise upon me. Also since i like writting stories, this helps my creative side have fun, w00t creativity!

[sergey500]

Hm...thinking about my response before last, how long does it take to make a page normally for you guys?

[Cowboychamploo44]

Hm...thinking about my response before last, how long does it take to make a page normally for you guys?

Well first make a little sketch and that alone takes me about 20 to 25 minutes. And then I draw it in ink, that takes me about 30 minutes and then I scan it in my computer and add the talking bubble things...

[Cowboychamploo44]

Hm...thinking about my response before last, how long does it take to make a page normally for you guys?

For me it takes about a few minutes for me...especially if it's one panel.

[sergey500]

Here is another page, Vol.1 Ch.2 Pg.5 http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/37148286/

[sergey500]

Oh I just realized, I should have maturity rating of my manga. My manga is probably rated M (Mature...) I think...

[sergey500]

Vol.1 Ch.2 Pg.6

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/40439060/

[Cowboychamploo44]

What happened to pages one through five?

[sergey500]

What happened to pages one through five?

What do you mean? They are still there. First page is pencil scanned of him walking and getting run over by the car. Thats suppose to be the first page. Which volume are you talking about 2? They are on the links I provided, also I give the deviant links a few pages back from here.

[Cowboychamploo44]

What do you mean? They are still there. First page is pencil scanned of him walking and getting run over by the car. Thats suppose to be the first page. Which volume are you talking about 2? They are on the links I provided, also I give the deviant links a few pages back from here.
Oh...

[sergey500]

Oh...

Small typo that was ticking me off that I wrote, "Which of the chapter did you look at? 2?" not volume...I didn't even get there yet.

[Davinchi]

even though you need to work on the lineart it was fun to read since it reminds me of bleach

oh yeah when death chopped off van's hand when did it grow back?