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Chaos-Shadow
03-28-2006, 07:47 PM
Ok me and my friend have worked on this for a bit i can problobly get some art put up if i had a scanner...gonna try using schools computers... x)

The story of Angels and Demons. Their was a time when contact between them was forbidden. two individuals who were in love decided to risk and do what was taboo for all. It did not last long for their secret was quickly uncovered, but not before they brought a new child into this world. The Angel mother was crusified and executed while thew Demon father was imprisoned and sent somewere not known to the living... or the devine.


Now the Child who is half blooded demon and angel seeks who his real parents were. Treated as a misfit for having one wing of an angel, and one of a devil is exiled down to earth were he begins his search for his parents, and the reason for his existance...

Well hows that? any tweaking any suggestions are welcome :)

Ok well me n my friend have done a very little revision. What do you guys think? we havnt started drawing the manga just yet till we can get the story interesting ;) so anything is changible at this point.

[volume 1] T he story of Angels and Demons. Their was a time when contact between them was forbidden. two individuals who were in love decided to risk and do what was taboo for all. It did not last long for their secret was quickly uncovered, but not before they brought a new child into this world. The Angel mother was crucified and executed while the Demon father was imprisoned and sent somewhere not known to the living... or the dead...because of this it turned into battles then with in time a full scale war between heaven and hell...

The child was kidnapped and taken to earth by those who came from hell.

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Years Later

The boy is now 16 years old, with a foster family unaware that their not his real parents until one day a man passes by with a circle with a star on his chest. He starts talking to the boy and tells him dat those are not his real parents. The boy starts having strange thoughts and memories that he never thought he had.He looks up and the man is gone leaving him with a lot to think about. He talks to his foster parents about this and confirm that its true,that their not his real parents. But who was that man with the symbol on his chest with a black coat...and how did he know about his past. He decides to go on his own to find the awnsers to who his real parents were.....
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One night during a thunder storm their was a huge flash of lightning,all of a sudden something falls from the sky. It had the wings of an angel he recognized his face it was his old friend David. He then tells him of what happned between when he was a child and how the war has gotten worst. And that the boy with no name was not human, neither demon or angel neither.








Again like iv said before suggestions ideas are welcome and WILL BE credited. ;)

UrbanRevolution
03-28-2006, 08:20 PM
cool idea! have you ever seen Jae Lee's HellShock? it's an american comic...

nicolepalmer
03-28-2006, 08:33 PM
geez that kind of sounds familiar to my story like not exactly or anything but kind of...this makes me kind of sad

slyabnye
03-28-2006, 08:45 PM
While I haven't seen it in manga form, I hope it doesn't come out as cliched as it sounds.

I think it's another over used plot but if you do it well, it might be alright. It's usually stuck between a prince and a servant or something similar though, I think.

How was the father sent somewhere unknown to anyone? Someone would have to know about it in order for him to have been sent there. Sorry, that's my logic kicking in.

I'll be interested into seeing where you take this.

Murasakivie
03-28-2006, 09:53 PM
The angel+demon parents thing has been done a million times over, and I wouldn't be surprised if a very similar story to this is already a manga. Right now the only similar ones that come to mind are The Demon Ororon and Princess Ai.

So I'd say be very careful about not turning it into a cliché. Is there something about your story that sets it apart from most other magical-being-forbidden-love-child story?

Ayokillyou
03-28-2006, 10:11 PM
There's no new ideas.

The creativity is in what you DO with the concept, not the concept itself. And that goes for everybody.

Murasakivie
03-28-2006, 10:50 PM
I can't say I agree with you. While it's true that anything new has ties and similarities to stories far and wide, it's possible to have an entirely new story.

Somebody might want to make a story about revenge, something that's been well-overdone, but if it features drug-peddling male cheerleaders, then you can't very well say that that isn't a new idea.

Ayokillyou
03-29-2006, 07:32 AM
I can't say I agree with you. While it's true that anything new has ties and similarities to stories far and wide, it's possible to have an entirely new story.

Somebody might want to make a story about revenge, something that's been well-overdone, but if it features drug-peddling male cheerleaders, then you can't very well say that that isn't a new idea.

Sure I can.

The dressing that an author puts on a story doesn't make it "new." When you cut to the core of most high-concept stories (ie, stories that have a gimmick or a catchy-hook), they're pretty much exactly like something else, but with a new pair of pants on.

kazuchiyo
03-29-2006, 09:20 AM
There's no new ideas.

The creativity is in what you DO with the concept, not the concept itself. And that goes for everybody.

Good point. But, at the same time, let me just note that there are an AWFUL lot of manga out there about angels and demons.

Kyaa the Catlord
03-29-2006, 10:01 AM
Heh, now if it was the princess of the angel world and the princess of the demon world in a contest over a human boy to bridge the three worlds... it would be Shuffle! Darnit. :P

But Sia-chan is cute in a psychotic sort of way. :P

Chaos-Shadow
03-29-2006, 07:07 PM
lol thx guys im gonna try to work on the story plot alittle more as i keep hearing basikly dat "its been done". Hmm yeah ill think about what to change etc. Thx guys,ur a huge help :)

kazuchiyo
03-29-2006, 10:07 PM
lol thx guys im gonna try to work on the story plot alittle more as i keep hearing basikly dat "its been done". Hmm yeah ill think about what to change etc. Thx guys,ur a huge help :)

And you, my friend, seem to have two of the most IMPORTANT personality traits to be a successful author/artist or successful ANYTHING in life: determination, and the ability to take criticism.
Best of luck to you!! :)

Rem Akimichi
03-29-2006, 10:35 PM
Good point. But, at the same time, let me just note that there are an AWFUL lot of manga out there about angels and demons.

True, but theres an aweful lot of angel/demon manga that are very original in plot (I'm actually think more along the lines of webcomics, since there are quite a few that I absolutly love that use the angel/demon concept in very awesome and inspired ways).

I agree with Ayo on this, it's what you do with it (and how you do it) that counts.

Good luck with your story! If its something you feel like sharing when the time comes, please do so! ^__^

Erisu-Chan
03-29-2006, 10:43 PM
If you can create the art to a great standard the story should be great. If they say that type of story is over used, why is it? because people tend to like those types of stories, if you have great characters (how they look, how they act etc.) with the story an idea is to have a flash back or so when the half demon/angel gets closer to the truth so when he gets there everything will join up.

remember a story needs structure so make sure that a+b=c


-Erisu-Chan



Never give up, take criticism and use it to make yourself stronger (i do that -sometimes i do feel people have a way of stepping over the line and think they can say what they please but do take the truth into concideration, it does one good :D )

Foreordained99
03-30-2006, 09:39 AM
yeah that plot has been used before, but id be interested to see what you do with it^^

Chaos-Shadow
04-04-2006, 08:47 PM
And you, my friend, seem to have two of the most IMPORTANT personality traits to be a successful author/artist or successful ANYTHING in life: determination, and the ability to take criticism.
Best of luck to you!! :)


thx i apreciate it,got my hopes up :) Iv bumped this thread because me n my friend have made a revision of the story. I hope its atleast 1% better.

Chaos-Shadow
04-06-2006, 09:12 PM
hello... critism apreciated...

spasticmouse
04-13-2006, 04:06 PM
Your story idea sounds kind of neat. I am assuming you have read the Angel Sanctuary manga and maybe watched the anime? Now I would recommend you try and fine tune the details of the story. Maybe work on a nice out line of your vision. Right now what kind of manga is this going to be? It sounds like its going to be a fighting anime kind of like Bleach? Also know one mentioned this point yet: Know your audience. What does your audience want to see? Focus and make sure you give the audience what they want and you will create a loyal fan following which is very important.

Also on the whole topic of this isn't original well maybe its not but some of the most important works in the world were copies or combination of other works. For example let’s take Star Wars, The Matrix, Harry Potter, and Wheel of Time. So really you don't have to make it first just do it the best with out openly copying the works that came before you. Remember keep your eye on the prize and you will go quite far!

Personally I love Angels and Demons. The nice character interaction has always made me a fan of that genre. Well over time I decided to take a stab at the genre myself. Which can be seen here http://www.spasticmouse.com/stories.htm.